帝始 2011-8-2 22:43
果然勇猛啊,见个上个,肥水不留外人甜。:sweat
dongtian008 2011-8-3 07:09
文笔上还有进步空间
男主有点喜欢上偷亲的感觉
搞了小姨子,又搞嫂子
唉
感谢楼主辛苦发帖
eau_cheng 2011-8-3 09:12
够厉害,很羡慕,老婆家里的女人除了丈母娘还没上手(估计也快了),大嫂,小姨子,小舅子老婆等几位无不倒在他抢下,还都是有空可钻,寄回难得啊,真实有福之人不用忙,一切都是水到渠成啊。
qq01912150 2011-8-3 13:16
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zjwxxxccczzz 2011-8-3 13:28
写的真好啊,不过家里就这几个了吗,还没搞完吧!!!
785403452 2011-8-3 22:44
我靠,主角的小姨子真是主动、直接啊,说着说着就接吻起来,太强悍了,主角简直就是被他小姨子强奸了。还有主角与小舅子的老婆简直应当是一对夫妻啊,心有灵犀一点通,同时想到与对方做爱。在厨房做爱,我个人认为是比较刺激的,虽然还没有这样的经验,不过将来我一定会尝试的。主角大嫂在开始拒绝他的时候,说了一句话“请把手拿出来”,在那个时候还说请,根本就是不拒绝嘛,主角的一家人都这样,非常容易上手。楼主的这篇文章选题非常不错,可惜情节特别是性爱情节太少,这篇文章应当写成长篇乱伦文章,必是一部经典之作。
61986708 2011-8-5 09:01
文笔确实不错,而且女人非常厉害啊,数量也蛮多,虽然有点情节上的问题,但是还是很好看的,尤其是小姨子的问题上,好多狼友都是很喜欢看的
yincangde 2011-8-5 16:35
后面写的还不错,开头写的比较像是记叙文,作者还需努力,但是家庭的题材不错,鼓励一下:teeth
lygqwer 2011-8-5 19:21
l厉害小姨子大嫂都被干了很是羡慕:excellence
风继续吹 2011-8-5 20:44
情节太简单了的说,细节性的描述不够,写全的话应该还是很不错的文章!
zdmhy123456 2011-8-6 00:06
怎么不把岳母也给上了呢?写在一起才够乱哦。
7841209563 2011-8-6 09:29
情节棒,谢谢楼主分享啦。文笔有待提高哦。
hxzhuhang 2011-8-15 22:45
文章跟简介不一样啊,才一个人,期待楼主下文:cry
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linxiaoyu1987 2011-8-16 14:10
文章看起来还不错 值得看一看 支持楼主!
lzg369 2011-10-14 08:34
整个文章明显头轻脚重不协调。感觉后半段与大嫂那一段是抄的,要不然不会有这么长。